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**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**

**The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.** **Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.**
The line graph shows the percentage of
the
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people
of
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from
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 four
Asians
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Asian
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 countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and a decade after. It can be seen that in the
year
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 2010 and after, Malaysians were and will be the highest.
On the other hand
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, the people of Thailand are the lowest compared to others.
Above all
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, all 4 countries' populations will increase in the future. During the
year
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 2000, the number of Indonesians and Thais
were
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was
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 both 20%, and in the next
decade
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decade,
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 it happened again, the population of
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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 and
Filipino
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Filipinos
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 were equally 30%. In conclusion, in the
year
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 2010 and 30 years after, the people of Malaysia were and will be the highest and Thais the lowest. Every
countries’
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country’s
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 population will increase in the future.
Additionally
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, during the
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year
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years
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 2000 and 2010, the percentage of Indonesians
were
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was
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equally
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equal
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 same with Thais and Filipinos.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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