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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The chart shows the rates for both houses with electrical devices and the hours of
house work through out
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housework throughout
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 the week in the years from 1920 to 2019.
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overall
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Overall
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, the percentage of hours of housework is following a
down
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downward
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 trend with the progress of time. And the rates of households with electronic appliances
is
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are
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 going
uo
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up
 with the years passing.
in
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In
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termes
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terms
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 of electronic machines, the number of houses owning refrigerators has significantly increased in 1940,
Jumping
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jumping
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 from around zero per
cent
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 up to
an
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apply
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approximarely
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approximately
of
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apply
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55 per
cent
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. Washing machines
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on
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, on
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 the other
hand
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hand,
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 hovered in a range of 40 per
cent
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 and 75 per
cent
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.
However
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, vacuum
cleaners
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cleaner
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perchases
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purchases
 increased gradually from 1920 to 1980. Hitting
it's
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its
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 peak at 1980 with rates of 100 per
cent
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.
in
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In
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 terms of hours of housework per week for each house, the numbers have declined dramatically from about half of the population to only about 15 per
cent
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 in the years 1920 and 1980. Reaching a low point of almost one-tenth
on
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of
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 people in 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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