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Children all over the world should learn to speak a single, universal language fluently in addition to their native language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Children
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 all over the
world
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 should learn to speak a single, universal
language
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 fluently
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 to their native
language
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. To what extent do you agree or disagree? All the
children
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 spoke
one
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language
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beside
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 their original
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 to know how to communicate with each other . Some
people
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 think that it is important to speak another
language
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 to communicate with others from all around the
world
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 I think that it is important
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children
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 to speak another
language
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contact
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make contact
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 with other friends. It’s important to
children
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 i know a
one
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language
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besides
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 there native
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 to communicate with friends around the
world
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 and we see nowadays how the Chinese and japanese can’t communicate with
people
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 from asia and europe because they cant speak there ower accent and we can't understand them . that means that
children
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 in the future must know how to contact others beside they must learn from each other to have a better future What
the
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are the
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 benefits
for
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of
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 having
one
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 extra global
language
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children
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first
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first,
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 they can communicate
each
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with each
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 other easily
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and without any problems in accents and
fluent
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.
and
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 they can
also
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 learn with it in schools and use it in
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work,
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that
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which
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 means more
high
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higher
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 level of services .
but
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are
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will
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 all the
people
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will
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apply
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accept it
to be
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as a second
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language
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language,
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 like we see countries around
us
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us,
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know
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 global
language
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like but
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 if you ask
him
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them
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with
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about
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language
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not
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, not
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 the country
one
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dont
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don't
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Turkia
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Turkey
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conclude
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conclude,
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i
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I
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 agree with the single universal
language
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in addition
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 to their native
language
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 to communicate , study
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and
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 work
and
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, and
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 it will be a huge global
civilization
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civilisation
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 in all of the global sectors
people
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 around the
world
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 can work in the country
he
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they
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wants
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want
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task achievement
You introduced the topic and expressed your opinion clearly.
coherence
You mentioned the importance of communication in a global context.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • fluently
  • native language
  • effective communication
  • global understanding
  • unity
  • educational opportunities
  • career opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • social integration
  • language barriers
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