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the chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average prices in 1989. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the chart below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average prices in 1989. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provides key information about the percentages of
change
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 in average
house
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 prices in New York, Madrid,
Tokyo
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, Frankfurt, and
London
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 from 1990 to 2002 compared with 1989. The units are measured in proportion.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
percentage
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 of
change
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 in the average
house
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price
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 in
London
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 had the highest figures,
while
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 the proportion of
change
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 in the average
house
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price
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 in
Tokyo
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 had the lowest. There were noticeable differences among the categories.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1996-2002, the
percentage
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 of
change
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 in the average
house
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price
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 in
London
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 recorded the highest proportion at around 12%,
whereas
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 the
percentage
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 of
change
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 in the average
house
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price
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 in
Tokyo
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 was significantly lower at -4%. Meanwhile, the figures for the
percentage
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 of
change
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 in the average
house
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price
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 in Frankfurt, New York and Madrid
also
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 changed from 1%, 5% and 4% in 1990-2002.
Then
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 the gap between the
percentage
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 of
change
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 in the average
house
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price
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 in
London
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 and
Tokyo
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 remained significant throughout the years. Compared to the
percentage
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 of
change
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 in the average
house
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price
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 in New York,
Tokyo
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 and
London
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 in 1989 showed a downward trend at
this
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 period.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, house, tokyo, london, percentage, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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