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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
the
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 line graphs give the proportion changes in ownership of washing machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner
and
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, and
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 the number of hours
spend
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spent
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 doing housework in
household
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households
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 in one nation from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, in the first figure,
it is clear that
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 all electrical appliances
has
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have
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 dramatically increased through the period. In the other chart, the time used for doing housework has plummeted
down
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drasticaly
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drastically
 over time. In the years 1920 to 1960, the use
for
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of
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refrigerator
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refrigerators
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has
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rocketed
with
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to
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 90% of households.
While
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,
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apply
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 the
utilization
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utilisation
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 for washing
machine
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machines
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 was about 60%. In the remaining period,
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the
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refrigerator and vacuum cleaner were
compeletly
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completely
 used by all residents,
while
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 washing machine usage remained stable. In the
year
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years
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 1920 to 1960, the number of hours being put to do household activities
have
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decreases
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decreased
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 from 50% to 20%,
then
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 it remained stable until the year
2000
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2000,
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 before
the
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decreasing to 10% of hours per week in 2019.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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