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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

1. Map: A land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built

The maps below give
the
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apply
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information
of
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about
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 the change in the
area
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 after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam . Can clearly see the big
different
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difference
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 change of the
area
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 from 1980 to the
area
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 in 2000. In 1980, with nature and environment
it
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had a
river
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 from north to south of the map. And to the left of the
river
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has
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is
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 a quite big forest
area
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 nearby that
also
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 has ancient structures and rare plants
and
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, and
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 animals.
From
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To
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 the right of the
river
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has
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is
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 a line of mountains
and
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, and
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 the irrigated farmland near it is the small village . In 2000 , it had lots of changes
with
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in
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 the environment and
people
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the people
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 of the
area
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. The lake has built a hydroelectric dam
so
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, so
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 the
river
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 has changed
to
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into
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 a big lake. The people there have activities like fishing
and
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, and
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 they open more hotels to the right of the lake .
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 they have
the
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a
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 line of electricity
and
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, and
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 the village has moved to the north of the
river
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task achievement
Try to give a clearer overview of the changes in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to make the order of your ideas clearer.
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Add more details to explain why these changes are important or interesting.
task achievement
You described the changes in the area well and mentioned some important features.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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