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The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full time and part time students about its services.

The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full time and part time students about its services.
The diagrams illustrate the outcomes of a survey carried out by a university library to gather feedback from full-time and part-time
students
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 regarding its services.
Overall
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, IT
support
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as well as
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 opening hours fulfil most full-time
students
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.
Although
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 most part-time
students
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 seem unsatisfied with the service, they still feel content with its opening hours. The level of satisfaction for IT
support
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, above 50% of full-time learners,
are
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is
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 very happy with IT
support
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 they can have,
while
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 that number falls significantly to only 20% for part-time learners, 45% of whom
also
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 feel unfulfilled with
this
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 service. Those who regard IT
support
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a
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as a
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quite good experience account for quite the same proportions for both types of
students
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. The level of satisfaction for opening hours,
the
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a
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 similar pattern can be observed that both part-time and full-time groups are pleased with
IT
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the IT
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support
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’s available time. of 87% and 72% respectively. Only 5% of part-time
students
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 are not happy at all with
this
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, which decreases to even only 1% for those learning full-time.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, support with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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