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Band 2.5

Map: A land area before and after a hydroelectric dam was built

The pictures illustrate the changes in
area
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 after the manufacture of a hydroelectric energy
dam
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Overall
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, the
land
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 had changed a lot from 1980 to 2000
but
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, but
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 there was a large variation
to
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in
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 urban development and natural
land
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. The biggest changes in the
area
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 that was the centre of
land
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was
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were
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 when almost all of the river became a lake
which
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, which
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 was set up as a hydroelectric
dam
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.
Thanked
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 to
hydroelectric
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the hydroelectric
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dam
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 appeared so
this
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area
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 was being
a
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apply
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agriculture
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agricultural
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land
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 become
a
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an
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 aquaculture
area
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 with
disappearance
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the disappearance
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 of irrigated
farm
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farms
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 and
occupation
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the occupation
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of
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by
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 fishing and
boat
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boats
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. With the expansion of the river, the order
to
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of
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 ancient structures radish, forest and
rane
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range
 plants and animals.
Besides
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, thanks to the development of a hydroelectric
dam
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 in
this
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land
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, it still
bringed
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brought
 about the improvement of the economy of
this
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area
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 via a village that became a hotel with a lake view. In order to have
this
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 success, electricity contributed a part not small
which
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, which
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 helped
this
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land
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 take form
a
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as a
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village near the zone with a high tension pole and two mountains
in
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on
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two
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both
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 sides of the river
was
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were
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 connected by a hydroelectric
dam
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion to help guide the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Use simpler sentences and clear language to make your ideas easier to understand.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples of changes in the land, such as the exact types of plants or animals affected.
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Make sure to check for grammar and spelling errors for better clarity.
task achievement
You described the main changes in the land well, such as the transformation from river to lake.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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