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The maps below show a plan of a city in 1950 and at the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a plan of a city in 1950 and at the present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates information about how the
city
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changed
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has changed
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 from 1950 to now.
Overall
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, the
city
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 has significant changes
especially
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, especially
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,
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apply
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 the population increased remarkably and more facilities
in
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have been added in
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 the surrounding area. In 1950,
in
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on
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 the Northside of the river ,the
city
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 consisted of 20.000 citizens
,
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.
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in
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In
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 addition, the
city
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 was connected by
the
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a
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 major road across the Business district from the North to the South and from the West to the East. The airport was
buit
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built
 in the East of the
city
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 and the government building in the South of the river and was connected with the bridge. At
the
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apply
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present, people
have
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has
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 increased tenfold and reached 200,000 people
,
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;
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however
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however,
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 the bridge was broken
making
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, making
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 the large area in the river nearly the
city
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 become a lake. A
comercial
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commercial
 was
punished
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built
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 surrounding an old
governent
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government
 building in the South of the lake
at
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, at
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 the same
time
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time,
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 many government buildings were
also
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 set up on these sides.A new road
connect between
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connecting
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 the South and the East was built
as well
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as
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and
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 the airport was substantially expanded
now
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apply
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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