The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003

The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information about the age of visitors from the UK to Spain in 1983 and in 2003
The pie charts illustrate the age distribution of UK
visitors
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to Spain between 1983 and 2003.
Overall
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, people aged from 35 to 54 remained the largest
group
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in both years,
although
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their proportion declined. Meanwhile, the percentage of younger and older tourists increased noticeably over the 20-year period. In 1983, half of the
visitors
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were aged between 35 and 54, making it the dominant age
group
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. Those aged 25 to 34 accounted for 20%,
while
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55+
visitors
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made up 16%. The number of
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aged 0 to 15 was 10%, and the smallest
group
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was 16 to 24 years old at just 4%. By 2003, the percentage of people aged 35 to 54 had dropped to 35%,
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the 55+
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rose significantly to 26%. The 16 to 24
group
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also
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saw a notable increase to 15%. The proportions of
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to 15 and 25 to 34 age groups both became equal at 12%, showing slight changes compared to 1983.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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