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Band 4.5

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

In the recent past,
people
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 tend to dig through the
history
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their
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of their
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residence
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 buildings.
That is
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 because
people
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 want to do something fun, and they use
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internet
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the internet
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, books, and news to find some
datas
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data
. It is fairly common that
people
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interested
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are interested
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 in the story behind their accommodations. As the news about the person
found
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who found
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 a secret room with
old
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old,
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 strange
furnitures
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furniture
 and gold inside the old house
belonged
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 to a rich man went viral throughout the
internet
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, it became a trend.
People
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 start wondering what kind of
background
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the background
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 of their living places. Maybe they would find some treasures if they dug under the house? Starting with some curiosity and
playful
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a playful
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 idea,
people
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 began searching about their residence. There are many ways to research
this
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. The easiest way would be
searching
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to search
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 on the
internet
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.
However
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, some old
informations
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information
 might not be included on the
internet
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. Libraries are
the
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an
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 interesting choice, as they
has
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have
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 kept numerous
of
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apply
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old prints,
such
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 as notes
newspaper
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apply
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, or books.
History
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 books are the reliable sources for
overall
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 data, but if you want to look
deeper
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deeper,
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 you may need other choices. Old newspapers recorded what happened in the past with
specific
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a specific
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 time and location. If it
too
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is too
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 difficult to find, asking the previous owner of the residence background can provide
informations
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information
, and you can keep searching as
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further
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far
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 as you want. With all these considerations, in my point of view,
people
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interested
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are interested
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on
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in
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 their residences'
history
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 because it was fun and trendy on the
internet
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.
Therefore
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, there are plenty of sources to search for the data,
such
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 as
an
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the
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internet
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, a
history
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 book, or an old
newpaper
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newspaper
.

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task response
Your introduction should clearly state the topic and give a brief overview of your main points. Make sure you provide a clear conclusion to sum up your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Try to connect your ideas more clearly. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to guide the reader through your points.
language
Make sure to use the correct verb forms and articles. For example, say 'the internet' instead of 'internet' and 'information' instead of 'informations'.
content
You have interesting ideas about why people want to know the history of their houses!

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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