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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. -> The line graph compares the urban populations of four countries between 1970 and 2020, with predicted figures for 2030 and 2024.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. -> The line graph compares the urban populations of four countries between 1970 and 2020, with predicted figures for 2030 and 2024.
The line chart provides key information about the proportion of residents living in cities in four different countries in Asia, in the period between 1970 and 2020, and it gives predictions of the
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 in two years, 2030 and 2040.
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, it is clear from the graph that there is a significant rise in the number of people living in cities over the given period.
In addition
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, the total
population
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 of Malaysia and Indonesia rose dramatically over the years,
whereas
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 the number of residents in Thailand and the Philippines shows a noticeable fluctuation.
According to
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 what is shown, in Malaysia and Indonesia in 1970, a few number of citizens lived in cities, around 30
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 and 10 per cent, respectively.
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, by 2040, there is a prediction that the
population
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 will rise to a peak, approximately 90
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 in Malaysia and 60
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percent
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 in Indonesia. In the other two countries, the Philippines and Thailand, the figure remained stable between 1990 and 2020, at almost 40
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percent
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 in the Philippines and 30
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 in Thailand. Despite that, the
population
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 is expected to rise after 2020
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therefore
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, the
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 prediction increased to around 50
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 in both countries.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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