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The diagram illustrates the production of ethanol. Overall, it is a cyclic process that involves a series of seven steps.

The diagram illustrates the production of ethanol. Overall, it is a cyclic process that involves a series of seven steps.
The diagram illustrates the production of
ethanol
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.
Overall
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, it is a cyclic process that involves a series of seven steps. The process begins with planting trees and culminates in producing
ethanol
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 gases in multiple formats.
To begin
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with
Punctuation problem
with,
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 the production of
ethanol
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.
First,
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plant trees until they grow, they
consumes
Correct subject-verb agreement
consume
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 sunlight and carbon dioxide as
an
Correct article usage
apply
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energy.
Then
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, the farmer begins harvesting those trees and sends them to factories to cut them into small pieces.
Following
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this
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, send them to labs to extract cellulose and add many chemicals.
Afterward
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Afterwards
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, study their genetic forms using
magnifier
Correct article usage
a magnifier
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then
Punctuation problem
, then
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 add sugar to feed
microbes
Correct article usage
the microbes
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.
Finally
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,
ethanol
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 is produced to
use
Wrong verb form
be used
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 for cars,
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 and trucks.
Then
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, the carbon emissions from transportation will start another production life.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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