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The diagram illustrates the cyclic process of producing ethanol fuel from biomass. Overall, the procedure involves seven stages, beginning with tree cultivation and ending with ethanol used as fuel, which emits carbon dioxide that feeds the cycle again.

The diagram illustrates the cyclic process of producing ethanol fuel from biomass. Overall, the procedure involves seven stages, beginning with tree cultivation and ending with ethanol used as fuel, which emits carbon dioxide that feeds the cycle again.
The diagram illustrates the cyclic process of producing
ethanol
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 fuel from biomass.
Overall
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, the procedure involves seven stages, beginning with tree cultivation and ending with
ethanol
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 used as fuel, which emits carbon dioxide that feeds the cycle again.
Initially
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, trees are planted and grown using sunlight and carbon dioxide. Once mature, they are harvested and transported to a factory, where they are cut into small pieces. These pieces are
then
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 sent to a laboratory where cellulose is extracted and mixed with chemicals. In the following step, genetic analysis is performed, and sugar is added to support microbial activity. The mixture undergoes fermentation, resulting in
ethanol
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 fuel.
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, the
ethanol
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 is used to power vehicles
such
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 as cars,
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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, and trucks. The carbon dioxide emitted during
this
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 stage returns to the environment and supports the growth of new trees,
thus
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 completing the cycle.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ethanol with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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