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The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbishment. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.

The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbishment. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.
The data in
tale
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the tale
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 the number of
individuals
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individual
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 visitors
experience
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apply
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to
Ashdown
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the Ashdown
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 museum and
comparing
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compares the data
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 between before and
year
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apply
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after ,in
addtional
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addition
,the data
shows
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also shows
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also
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 the results of the
visitor
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visitors
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satisaction
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satisfaction
.
Overall
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, both chart shows
same
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the same
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 period,
will start
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starting
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 with
year
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the year
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 before refurishment
,
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.
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it
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It
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 can
seen
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be seen
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 clearly that
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the guests
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guests
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guest
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 surveys
shows
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show
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 the majority
dissatisfied
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were dissatisfied
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 by 40%
,
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.
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on
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand,
year
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the year
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 after refurishment
guests
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guest
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 results
shows
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show
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 40% satisfied,
while
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 5% of the visitors
no
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had no
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 response in both
period
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periods
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.
To sum up
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, the visitor
experuence
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experience
 improved and has
significant
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a significant
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impct
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impact
to
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on
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 the
surverys
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surveys
hthe
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the
 majority of visitors satisfied.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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