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The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population if four different Asian countries living in cities between 1970 and 2020 with additional predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares the past and predicts the future population of
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urben
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urban
 cities for
diffrent
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different
 Asian nations from 1970 to 2040.
Overall
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, the graph
presentes
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presents
 Malaysia as the highest
precentage
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percentage
 of total population living in cities,
while
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 the lowest nations
at
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in
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 the chart are
devided
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divided
 between Indonesia and Thailand.
It is clear that
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 Malaysia is ranked in the first place as the highest
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urben comunity
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urban community
 with a
masive
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massive
 increase in 1990 ( 45 %) to reach 75 % in 2025, and will be around 80 % in the future.
However
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, the significant growth is noted in Indonesia, which is at
the
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lowes
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lowest
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 point in
1970
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1970,
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then
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 becoming the second most
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urben
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urban
 populated country with 45% in 2010. In 2040, Indonesia will hit 60 per cent.
On the other hand
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, Thailand are facing a decline
of
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in
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 people in
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urben
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urban
area
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areas
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, espically
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espically
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especially
in
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apply
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between 1990 to 2000
,
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.
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in
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In
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 contrast, the data presents
Thailant
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Thailand
 as the
last
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 place among the other nations

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Vocabulary: Replace the words urben with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • population
  • urban
  • cities
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • grow
  • significant
  • compare
  • predictions
  • features
  • country
  • dwellers
  • reflect
  • levels
  • economic
  • development
  • job opportunities
  • living conditions
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