The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates information about the
earnings
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of three bakeries in Calgary from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
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It
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it
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has been clear that
Amandine
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Bakery
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has significantly increased its annual
earnings
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than other bakeries.
Mari
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Bakershop
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slightly decreased
annual
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its annual
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earnings
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,
also
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the annual
earnings
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of
Bolo
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Cakery
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has
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have
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remained steady
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then
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and then
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started to increase. In 2000,
Amandine
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Bakery
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Bakery's
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earnings
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was being remained which
was
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were
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approxomatly
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approximately
60k.
Mari
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Bakershop
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Bakershop's
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earnings
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was rised
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rose
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nearly 100k.
Bolo
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Cakery
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was 30k from
earnings
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. In 2010,
Amandine
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Bakery
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has
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apply
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increased
their
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its
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earnings
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to more than 100k.
Mari
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Bakershop
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has
been
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apply
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declined
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to 40k.
Bolo
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Cakery
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has highly
risen
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rise
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earnings
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in earnings
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more
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, more
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than 60k
than
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, than
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what they earned in 2000.
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,
Mari
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Bakershop
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earned more in 2005 than other bakeries.
Amandine
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Bakery
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their
earnings
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start
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started
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to increase in 2006.
Bolo
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Cakery
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has started to increase
earnings
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from 2006 to 2010,
while
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Mari
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Bakershop
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decreased from 2006 to 2010
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apply
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earnings
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, amandine, bakery, mari, bakershop, bolo, cakery, k with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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