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Band 2.5

The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, • and make comparisons where relevant.

The two present maps detail changes that are going to be
done
Verb problem
made
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 after improvements in the layout of a university's sports centre. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that several changes will
be happened
Wrong verb form
happen
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. Most noticeable is
consolidation
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the consolidation
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 of outdoor courts and
expansion
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the expansion
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 of the
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
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 zone. The middle zone
which
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, which
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 includes changing
room
Use synonyms
, reception,
enter
Replace the word
entrance
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, seating places, gym, and 25
meters
Correct your spelling
25-meter
pool
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pool,
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 will remain largely the same, though the gym area is going to double to the east side.
Instead
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 of western outdoor courts, it will be built
huge
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a huge
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 leisure park, and along the southern part of the map it will be constructed changing
room
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 and sports shop that will be connected
with
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to
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reception
Correct article usage
the reception
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 zone . Outdoor courts that are situated on the east will be removed in
favor
Use the right word
favour
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 of
sports
Correct article usage
a sports
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 hall, two dance
studio
Fix the agreement mistake
studios
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,
cafe
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a cafe
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, and another changing
room
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.
Furthermore
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,
cafe
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the cafe
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 and the second changing
room
Use synonyms
 are
also
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 planned to be linked with
enter
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the entrance
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly explain all key features of the maps when summarizing them. You missed some important parts of the layout changes.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words and phrases to make your writing flow better. This will help with the overall structure of your writing.
positive
You have a clear introduction that describes the main topic of the maps. This sets a good context for your writing.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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