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Band 3

Some people argue that historic buildings should be preserved in their original form. Others argue that this is both inadvisable and impossible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Historical architectural monuments are the proof of intelligence and creativity from back in the old
days
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where
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 there was not much technology
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. Historians and archaeologists believe that preservation of these ancient buildings should be
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priority
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the priority
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 list. Others believe it's not necessary
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 preservation
to
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of
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 these structures
are
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 next to impossible. I strongly agree with
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the statement
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 of protecting buildings
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 in
this
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essay
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 we will discuss how it's very important to protect our heritage. First of all, these places generate lots of revenue and
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 a famous tourist attraction for international or domestic travellers.
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 Taj Mahal in India
,
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apply
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 is
piece
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a piece
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 of art and
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a symbol
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 of love. Millions of tourists
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visit
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Taj
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the Taj
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 Mahal every year
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thus
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 it not only generates revenue but
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 provides many jobs to the local community.
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, it's not easy to
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 all the challenges and costs to keep the old heritage intact. But with community awareness and history
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 people can make it happen and make governments spend more money on these
type
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 of projects.
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,
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 it's a time and
money consuming
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 process but it is very important for us to save as much as we can to show the beautiful history to our upcoming generations.

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structure
Your introduction could clearly outline both views before stating your agreement.
coherence
Make sure to clearly separate your paragraphs for each viewpoint.
task response
Provide more specific examples to support your points.
example
You provided a good example of the Taj Mahal to support your point about tourism.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tangible connections
  • cultural heritage
  • architectural features
  • economically beneficial
  • safety regulations
  • environmental standards
  • functional facilities
  • significant alterations
  • integrating modern elements
  • extending lifespan and relevance
  • technical challenges
  • financially unfeasible
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