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Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
 the future
all
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, all
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 cars, trucks and buses will be
driverless
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. The only
person
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people
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 travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. I think the advantages of
driverless
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 vehicles outweigh the disadvantages. It can improve
traffic
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 safety and travel efficiency. Even if there are shortcomings, they can be solved through technological progress and policy adjustments. At the beginning, the benefit of
driverless
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 for safer
traffic
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 is the
reduce
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 of accidents
cause
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caused
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 by human error. People are easy to
making
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mistake
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mistakes
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while
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 driving,
such
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 as not being able to see the
road
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 clearly when tired, but
driverless
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rely
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cars rely
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 on computers to see the
road
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. My uncle was so tired from a long drive that he almost crashed. If he switched to
driverless
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, the system would have avoided danger in advance.
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,
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can
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vehicles can
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 improve
traffic
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 efficiency. Intelligent cars can plan
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road
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a route
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 through network collaboration, avoid
traffic
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 jams, and save fuel.
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, drivers no longer have to keep an eye on
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road
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the road
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, and passengers can use their free time for work and rest. My friend uses
driverless
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 every day and it
giving
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gives
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 him an extra 30 minutes to handle work every day, making his life easier.
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, elderly and disabled people used to have
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go
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 out, but
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can
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cars can
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 help them. My
neighbor
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neighbour's
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 grandmother only went out once every six months before. Now there
have
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driverless
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and
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car and
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 she can go to the market and find friends every week. Of course, there are
also
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 issues with
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,
such
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 as drivers may
losing
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lose
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 their jobs and
who
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apply
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need to
protect
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be protected
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 in the event of an accident. But these can be solved,
such
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 as
test
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first,
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explain
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 the rules clearly and so on. In summary, in the long run,
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 makes
traffic
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 safer and more efficient
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 its benefits are much more important than the shortcomings, which is worth promoting for development.

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task
State your view clearly at the start and keep it in mind as you add points. Give two to three reasons and back each with a short, easy example.
coherence
Make each idea fit in its own paragraph. Use easy linking words like first, then, also, but, for example to show how points go together and to guide the reader.
coherence
Choose examples that are easy to follow and match the point they are used for. Check grammar to make the example be clear.
content
The essay shows a clear view on driverless cars.
content
There are real life examples that back the idea.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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