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Band 4.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Driverless
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 become the new mode of transportation in the future, which means that drivers will no longer be required. I believe that the advantages of
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 approach
outweight
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outweigh
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disadvantaged
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. One major advantage of driverless vehicles is that
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 can enhance road safety in life. Many
people
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 suffer from the consequences of drunk driving and fatigued driving. These are the main causes of traffic accidents. Autonomous driving systems can perfectly resolve these issues. They continuously monitor road conditions and strictly adhere to traffic regulations.
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, some
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electric
 vehicles have already
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this
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 feature to demonstrate their ability to reduce collision risks. Another key benefit is to provide greater convenience. Autonomous vehicles increase mobility opportunities for those unable to drive,
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 as
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the elderly
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,
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 with disabilities, and children.
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, commuters can better
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 travel time for work, study, or relaxation
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 of focusing on driving. A possible downside of autonomous driving is the potential for technical failures. Autonomous driving technology is still not quite perfected, and once a vehicle
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, it becomes dangerous. What's more,
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 driving jobs become obsolete, many drivers may face unemployment. Currently, the driving industry employs a significant portion of the workforce. If
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 position, a lot of
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 will lose their livelihood security. From my perspective,
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 it carries certain risks, there are solutions available. It can signify progress and advancement for society as a whole. And
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 improving
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's lives. In conclusion, as the technology matures, driverless
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vehicles will
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 undoubtedly change our transportation systems for the better. The benefits of it far
outweight
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outweigh
their
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its
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 potential disadvantages.

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grammar
Fix big grammar and spelling mistakes. Examples: 'outweight' -> 'outweigh', 'ss' -> 'driving', 'disadvantaged' -> 'disadvantages'.
development
Give more proof or example for each idea. Add details to support your points.
coherence
Use clearer link words to join ideas. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence and use connect words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'for example'.
task response
The essay shows a clear view and a conclusion that leans to driverless tech.
coherence
The body gives ideas on safety and how driving can be easier for those who cannot drive.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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