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The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that have taken place at the seaside town of Templeton between 1990 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map displays some changes that happened at the seaside town of
templeton
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Templeton
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 from the
year
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 1990 to 2005.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the new
amentities
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amenities
, like
supermarket
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supermarkets
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,
factory
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factories
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,
airport
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airports
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, and some constructed
buildings
Punctuation problem
buildings,
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had
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have
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 developed. There were some houses
were
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that were
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 newly
build
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built
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, and
lake
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a lake
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,
hospital
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a hospital
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 beside
school
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the school
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remain
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remained
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unchaged
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unchanged
. In the
year
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 1990, there were more
greenary
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greenery
 and
tree
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trees
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but
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, but
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,
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apply
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 in the
year
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2005
Punctuation problem
2005,
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that were
Verb problem
they
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 decreased. New facilities have been constructed,
such
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 as
airport
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an airport
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 near the school.
Railway
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The railway
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 track had been extended in
west
Correct word choice
a westward
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 direction.
New
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A new
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 factory had been developed near the railway station
and
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, and
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 all the houses and trees were removed in the
year
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 2005.
Similarly
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,
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 was developed in the place of
house
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a house
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 in the
year
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 2005. Some houses in the north-west direction had been demolished and replaced with
few
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a few
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 buildings
and
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, and
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 the lake was
jsut
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just
 near
to
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apply
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the
building
Punctuation problem
building,
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 was
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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unchaged
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unchanged
in the
year
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 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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