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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Remind your employer what the course was about. Explain why the course was useful to you in your work. Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues.

Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to express my gratitude
to select
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for selecting
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 me for the training
course
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 on hybrid vehicles. First of all, let me give you
the
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 briefing about the training session. The session has been focused on how to work on hybrid cars, what
are
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apply
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the basic requirements of protective
equipments
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equipment
, and
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are, and
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 learning about
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the diagnose
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diagnose
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diagnosis
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 and repair of the vehicle. It was
organized
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organised
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 in my former college
which
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 was easy to commute
for
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to for
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 me. I got
chance
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the chance
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 to meet my beloved professors during
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course
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. As you are aware
about
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of
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recent
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the recent
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 transformation of gas
vehicle
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vehicles
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 into hybrid and
electronic
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electric
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vehicle
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vehicles
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, that session is extremely important for my future. I had learnt immense lessons which can be helpful to our shop flow. I can identify any hybrid car problem and
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 to fix it without any
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 guidance. It will
be boosting
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 our business as well. Unlikely, one thing that came to mind
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 attending the
course
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 is
our
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that our
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 old staff would not
idle
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 for
this
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 task. They hold
stereotype
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a stereotype
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 belief that it is not safe to work on
hybrid
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a hybrid
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 car because high battery voltage
has running
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 through the car.
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, it was a very knowledgeable
course
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 and I would love to participate again in future. If you need more information, you have my phone number. Feel free to contact me. Yours faithfully, Pratik

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coherence and cohesion
Provide clearer transitions between points to improve the flow of your ideas.
task achievement
Add more examples to support your main ideas about why the course was useful and why some colleagues may not benefit from it.
task achievement
You successfully explained the course content and its benefits to your work.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter is polite and well-structured, making it easy to read.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Training program
  • Skill enhancement
  • Job responsibilities
  • Practical exercises
  • Hands-on experience
  • Operational efficiency
  • Subject matter
  • Prerequisites
  • Specialized knowledge
  • Teaching methodology
  • Learning preferences
  • Feedback
  • Course facilitator
  • Professional development
  • Engagement
  • Interactive components
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