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The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries, and other countries from 2006 to 2010 (Figures are in millions of dollars)

The table shows the amount of money given to developing countries by the USA, EU countries, and other countries from 2006 to 2010 (Figures are in millions of dollars)
The table compares how much money was given to
countries
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 which are developing by the USA,
EU
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countries
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, and other
countries
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 between 2006 and 2010. The figures are measured in
miilions
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millions
 of
dollars
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.
Overall
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, all the
countries
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 experienced an increase by the final year. The USA dominated the table in all the listed years, and the gains in the
EU
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 and other
countries
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 were marginal. The USA showed a gradual increase, starting with 9,8
million
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dollars
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 in 2006, approximately doubled by 2010, reaching 20,3. In terms of
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EU
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the EU
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, it took the second place, experienced a rise, from 3,1
million
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dollars
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 in 2006, to 4,1
million
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dollars
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 in 2010. Other
countries
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,
with
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apply
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showing a rise in all the period given, mirrored the
EU
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 trend, with 2.8
million
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dollars
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 in 2006 and 3,7
million
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dollars
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 in 2010. In total, despite a fluctuation in 2009, the amount of money given to other
countries
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 had nearly doubled, rising from 15.7 in 2006 to 28.3 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, eu, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • money
  • aid
  • countries
  • developing
  • amount
  • year
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • contrast
  • overall
  • trend
  • highest
  • specific
  • pattern
  • explain
  • reasons
  • financial
  • source
  • significant
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