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The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Ha

The chart below shows the places in which UK people gained access to the internet from 1990 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. Thu Ha
The bar chart illustrates the places in which United
Kingdom's people
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Kingdom
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 gained access to the internet between 1990 to 2004.
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, the majority of members preferred home over the years.
On the other hand
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, the number of people who use
internet
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the internet
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 at work has declined gradually.
According to
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 what is shown, in the four
periods
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periods,
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 most people liked to use the internet at Home. By 1998 and 2004, home was
its
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at its
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 highest point, around 55.
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, between 1998 to 2000, the work remained unchanged , the same thing with the library from 2002 to 2004, it was stable. In terms of college, it increased,and by 2002, was reached 25 . The fall in 2004 was around 19.

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