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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is a well-discussed topic that non-native speakers may face tangible social and practical problems
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 living overseas.
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 some people strongly believe that speaking in another
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 does not have any impact on an individual’s
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, I truly reckon that knowing a local tongue is not enough to feel free in
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 foreign territory. A compelling argument is
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cultural background
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cannot be acquired with a foreign
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 has a substantial effect on the social
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 of every nation. Communication with natives without knowing their traditions and rituals may pose some misunderstandings that will ruin a newcomer’s social adaptation. A simple illustration of it is a greeting in some cultures.
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, in Kazakhstan, greeting with two hands is a sign of respect, and not
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 unspoken rule can fail the first impression of an immigrant, even
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 can speak the local
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. Another reason that affects
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a newcomer’s social
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 is a fear of communication with locals in their
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. As people are not able to communicate brilliantly in another tongue instantly, they are usually scared to start a conversation with natives.
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, if individuals around do not give any help or support to newcomers, their social isolation and insecurity will only grow.
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, fear of using a foreign
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 plays a crucial role in a person’s adaptation and cannot be ignored.
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, developing social
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 in an abroad country is highly impacted by numerous factors
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 as cultural differences, confidence of an immigrant and others, except knowing the local tongue.

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Try to provide more examples to support your points. This will help your argument and make it clearer.
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You provided good examples to support your main points, especially about cultural greetings.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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