The charts below show the percentage of students on an adult education centre taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.

The charts below show the percentage of students on an adult education centre taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the percentage of students on an adult education centre taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.
The pie chart depicts the ratio of
students
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students'
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courses
on
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at
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the adult education centre in
this
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resent
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recent
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year
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and in 1985. It is clear from the graph
there
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that there
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are
an
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apply
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expanded
courses
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courses,
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also
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there is one
course
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has fanished
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fanished
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vanished
.
According to
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what is shown, in the upper
year
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of the chart art studio was 17 per
cent
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and lost two per
cent
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over
this
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year
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.
Moreover
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, modern languages
such
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as French, German, and Spanish
,
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apply
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was
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were
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almost a fifth, but dropped to 17 per
cent
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. Meanwhile, fitness and dance
session
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sessions
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got 22 per
cent
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in
1985
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1985,
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while
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now just
has
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have
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the same amount.
Furthermore
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, there
is
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are
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some parts
have
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that have
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had
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apply
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increased.
For example
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, cookery has a minority number and got
extra
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an extra
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five numbers
in
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apply
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this
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year
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.
IT
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The IT
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course
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,
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apply
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was not in 1985
but
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, but
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right now has
the
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a
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big part
which
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, which
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is 27 per
cent
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of the data.
To sum up
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, we could say that there is one
course
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gone and another class come, Music appreciation had
oridy
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only
about one in ten with less
two
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than two
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per
cent
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, so
that is
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not
suprising
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surprising
to get out of the
lest
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list
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. IT is a new thing and got more than any other
course
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in the chart.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, course, cent with synonyms.
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