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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology, which can prevent and solve crimes. Do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that the decline in crime rates in recent years is largely
due to
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 advancements
of
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technology
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 that help both prevent and solve criminal activities. I agree with
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 view, as technological innovations have significantly enhanced
capabilities
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the capabilities
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 of law enforcement and deterrent to potential offenders.
Although
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 the latest tech innovations
somewhat
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are somewhat
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 expensive, their impact
are
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is
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 totally worth
of
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apply
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its
investments
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. With the widespread use of Closed-circuit television (CCTV) and other
survilence
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surveillance
technology
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 in commercial buildings, public places and even residential areas, psychological
detrrent
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deterrent
 and fear
to get
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of getting
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cought
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caught
 discourages criminals to
crimes
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.
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,
In
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in
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 London and
Singapore
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Singapore,
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 there is a noticeable decline in crime rates, especially in vandalism and
streets
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street
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 fights,
due to
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 the presence of
high resolution
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surviellence
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surveillance
 in the public areas.
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, the advanced
technology
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 has empowered the police with
cutting edge
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 tools,
such
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 as forensic
database
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databases
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, predictive
softwares
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software
 and developed cybersecurity measures. These developments not only effectively solve a crime that has been
commited
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committed
 but
also
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 cold cases that were not resolved because of the lack of advanced resources.
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, in recent
years
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years,
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 many offenders have been
cought
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caught
 by police with the help of DNA testing, who have committed several serious
crimes
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 but always
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escaped
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due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of proper evidence.
Although
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technology
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 has
also
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 led to several new cyber
crimes
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, the other benefits
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 fostering in solving
criminal
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of criminal
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 activities and preventing
them
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them,
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 cannot be ignored. In conclusion,
while
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 with the help of advanced
technology
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 cyber
crimes
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 are
also
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 rising, the improved forensics , predictive
softerwares
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software
 and new measures in cybersecurity cannot be underestimated. In my opinion,
technology
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 has made
safer
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a safer
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 place than we had before.

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You present a clear opinion on the topic, stating that you agree with the statement.
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Your ideas about the benefits of technology in crime prevention are good and show understanding of the topic.
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