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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people think that the government should provide free education at every level. However, some say that individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt
that
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is
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nowadays there are different
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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 about
education
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 fees
,
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.
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 Some people
says
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say
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 that
government
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the government
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 have the
responsability
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responsibility
 to pay
education
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 fees,
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While
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while
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other
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others
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 think that
person
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a person
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 should pay
his
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their
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 university fees. I firmly believe that
education
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have
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 to be free to everyone. There are several
reason
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reasons
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 why to agree with
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 The first and the main reason is that learning is very vital and important to
everyhuman
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every human
even
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, even
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 for
low income
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low-income
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 and poor families.
For
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instance
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 there are
alot
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a lot
 of kids
they
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who
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 have to go
work
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to work
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 early to get
a
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apply
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money for food
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while
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, while
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 they are smart
but
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the
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life
forced
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 them to work rather than
studying
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study
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.
Furthermore
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,
education
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 is a right for all human, In another word everyone allow to learn and study ,
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 there is another positive point when every citizim is educated it will be a good outcomes to the goverment as it is supported by a resarch that 40% of student become a big things in future which that will lead to increase in economy and the outside view of the country.
Overall
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,
In
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in
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 my opinion
goverment
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government
 must take
a
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apply
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responsability
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responsibility
 and provide free
education
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 to every person
whant
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who wants
 to learn and
to
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be educated.

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task achievement
Your introduction needs to clearly outline both views before stating your opinion. This will help the reader understand the different perspectives more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Try to add more paragraphs to separate your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea to improve flow.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with grammar; for example, use 'responsibility' instead of 'responsability' and 'citizen' instead of 'citizim'. This will make your writing clearer.
task achievement
Include specific examples to support your points. For example, explain how free education benefits a country's economy more clearly.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic and express it confidently, which is a strong point in your writing.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • financial barriers
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • socio-economic inequality
  • personal investment
  • economic burden
  • diverse academic environment
  • student debt crisis
  • academic prestige
  • national innovation
  • balanced approach
  • subsidized education
  • scholarships and grants
  • personal responsibility
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