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Band 5

Some people think news has no connection to the people lives. So it is a waste of time to read the news in newspaper and watch television news program. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In
this
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 contemporary epoch, it is really important to be aware of what is happening in the
surrounding
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. It is argued by some
people
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 that listening
and
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 reading
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news
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the news
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 is unnecessary.
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 essay intends to elaborate
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resons
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reasons
 why I completely disagree with
this
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 notion, in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
owning
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 to several
reason
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reasons
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 that emphasise
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 why I favour listening to
news
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.
Firstly
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, it helps us to know what is happening in the city, country, or
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world. The best example to explain
this
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 point is COVID-19,
it
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 started to spread from China to all over the world, but the only way we got to know about it was through
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news
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the news
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.
Secondly
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, when there are riots in the country, and the internet access is limited
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then
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, then
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only
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the only
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 way to know the situation and keep ourselves safe is through listening
or
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 reading
news
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.
Therefore
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, in the situation of
emergency
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an emergency
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 or war,
news
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 is the only source to get information. Moving
further
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,
news
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channels
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 not only provide
news
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they
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, they
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also
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 inform about severe weather conditions;
for instance
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, there was a heat warning in Ontario recently, none of the online websites mentioned
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it
;
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 but the
news
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channels
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 provided the information during
weather
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the weather
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 forecast, and asked
people
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 to drink water regularly in order to keep themselves hydrated.
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,
news
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channels
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 broadcast the speech of
country's
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the country's
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 president, and inform the
people
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 about new policies and regulations. They try to keep individuals updated about the
working
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workings
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 of
government
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the government
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.
To conclude
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, it can be inferred from the above confabulation that there are abundant
of
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pros of reading
newspaper
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newspapers
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as well as
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 listening to
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 programs.
Hence
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, it is suggested that the
news
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channels
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 should provide
right
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the right
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 information to the
people
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 and serve the community.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay presents clear ideas, but try to organize them better. Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to help the reader follow your argument.
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While you provided some examples, try to include more specific details or statistics to support your points and make them stronger.
grammar and spelling
Make sure to proofread your essay for grammar and spelling mistakes. This will help your ideas come across more clearly.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion throughout your essay, showing your strong agreement with the importance of news.
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Your use of real-world examples, like COVID-19, helps to make your points relatable and relevant.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sensationalized
  • biased
  • misinformation
  • alternative sources
  • public opinion
  • awareness
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • information overload
  • shaping
  • productive activities
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