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The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005.

The graph below shows UK air pollutants in millions of tonnes, from three different sources, between 1990 and 2005.
The line graph illustrates the levels of
air
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 pollutants in the UK from three different sources, from 1900 to 2005.
Overall
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, total
emissions
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 experienced a substantial decline over the period, primarily driven by a reduction in industrial and household pollution,
while
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 transport
emissions
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 rose gradually after the mid-20th century. In 1990, the total amount of
air
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 pollutants was approximately 8
million
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tonnes
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, which being the largest contributor
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 accounting for approximately 6
million
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tonnes
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. Both the households and transport showed the same results of
air
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 contamination, at only 1
million
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tonnes
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. The number of
emissions
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 remained relatively stable until around 1993, after which a sharp decline in industrial
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 and household pollution began.
According to
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 the line graph, Industry
emissions
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 showed a gradual decline of around 3
million
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tonnes
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 by the end of the year.
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, the number of
air
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 contaminations from households remained stable during four years,
then
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 dropped to 0
million
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tonnes
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 in 2005.
In contrast
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, transport pollution increased around 1,5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1993,
then
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 dropped to 1
million
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tonnes
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 in 1996 but began to rise, peaking at just over 3
million
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tonnes
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 by 2005. Despite
this
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 increase, the total continued to fall, to around 5
million
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 in the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, emissions, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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