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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

There is no denying the fact that the place where you live is important, because you spend most of your life living and creating memories there.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits of living in tall
buildings
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 and living in
large
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a large
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 house.
To begin
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 with, there are many advantages
for
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to
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 building tall
buildings
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 in the city.
Firstly
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,by building tall
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buildings
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building
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 structures we can save land.
In other words
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, more people can live there, especially
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in
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 crowded areas with limited space.
In addition
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, taller
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 can be beneficial for the environment.
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, people will use small spaces,
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 means more green spaces and healthier environments. In terms of the benefits of houses on wide land, it would be a wise choice for the families. It is
also
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 possible to say that children can play outside freely and safely in the garden,because everyone knows each other well.
Moreover
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, it is a peaceful and more productive lifestyle.
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, fresh air with less pollution and noise,
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and even
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a
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apply
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healthier food sources.
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 affect children in a positive way and make them stronger. In conclusion, there are many good reasons for both taller and wider houses. It is
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 true that building
a
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apply
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taller
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 is a great solution for modern cities because it saves space and supports population growth.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion or a clear preference for one solution.
coherence and cohesion
Add connecting words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to improve the flow.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points, such as cities that use these housing types.
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You introduced the topic well, and the importance of where we live is clear.
coherence and cohesion
You presented both sides of the argument, which shows a balanced view.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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