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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differetn countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differetn countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph and table
depicts
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 the data about
water
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usage
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 globally and
water
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 consumption in two different nations the
Brazil
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 and the Democratic Republic of
Congo
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.
Overall
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, the
use
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 of
water
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 in
the
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apply
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agriculture is increasing significantly
and
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, and
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 the domestic
usage
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 is
lowest
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the lowest
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.
population of the
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The population of
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Brazil
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 is very high
compare
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compared
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 to
Democratic
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the Democratic
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 Republic of
Congo
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, and
The
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apply
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brazil
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Brazil
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used
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uses
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to
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too
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 much
water
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 compared to
Democratic
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the Democratic
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republic
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Republic
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 of
Congo
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. In
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a detail
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detail
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detailed
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prespective
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perspective
 of the graph, the global
usage
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 of
water
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is
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apply
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started at nearly 0% and
styed
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remained
 constant till
1950
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1950,
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then
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 both
were
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apply
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rose little and the Industrial
use
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fined
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peaked
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 at above 100 km3,
while
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 the domestic
use
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completed at
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reached
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closely
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close
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500
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to 500
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 km3. The
agriculture
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agricultural
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use
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 started at above 500 km3 in 1900 and
was
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apply
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increased gradually and finished
nearly
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at nearly
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 300 km3 in 2000. In
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a detail
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detail
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detailed
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prespective
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perspective
 of the table, the
water
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 consumption in
the
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apply
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Brazil
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 and
The
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the
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Congo
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in
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at
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 the end of
20th
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the 20th
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 century, the
Congo
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has
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had
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 very
less
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little
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usage
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 and population.
The
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Brazil
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brazil
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 has 176 million
peoples
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people
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 and they
used
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use
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 359 m3
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water
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of water
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,
while
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 the
Congo
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 has only 5.2 million people
used
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use
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 8 m3 of
water
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, brazil, congo, use, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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