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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

In some nations, there
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number
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 of
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 interested in finding out about their house or building's history. The reason is,
people
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interested
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are interested
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to know
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in knowing
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 what events
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happened in their
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 in the past, and they can use
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the internet
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 of information. Many
people
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 are interested
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 about the history of their building.
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exactly happened in the past, some are hoping that the
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 where they look was a
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 for something historical, some
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 do
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 things only for entertainment and educational purposes.
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, many
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 in Indonesia are interested
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 their house
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 occupied by a famous political
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 others only
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 for fun and as a part of learning.
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 action can be done through online information as their main
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 of
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viable enough to be
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utilised
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 of
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 it can sometimes be inaccurate because of several factors
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 can be solved by using journals or research
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 for finding out the events that have
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occurred
 in the building in a certain period of time.
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, Google has a feature called Google
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,
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 purpose
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is to search
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 that are based on research and journals that are accurate. In conclusion,
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 are two different purposes
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why
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 are interested in finding out about the history of their buildings. First
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, they are hoping that some historical events happened in their
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 where they
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are interested
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 in, and the second is, they only do
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 things for entertainment and educational purposes.
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, which can
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Task Achievement
Your introduction needs to be clearer. Try to restate the question in your own words.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure you have a clear main point in each paragraph. Right now, they feel a bit mixed up.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check your grammar and spelling. Some words like 'utillize' are spelled incorrectly.
Task Achievement
When you give examples, make them clearer and more specific to improve understanding.
Task Achievement
You explained why people are interested in their building's history well.
Coherence and Cohesion
You mentioned online resources, which is relevant and helpful information.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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