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Band 4.5

Some people think the money spent in developing the technology for space exploration is not justified. There are more beneficial ways to spend this money. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, people tend to get more information about everything, including
space
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 exploration.
This
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 knowledge is priceless for human history.
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, there are some
grups
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groups
 that disagree about
explorating
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exploring
 the unknown places
due to
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 the lack of funding.
This
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 essay will discuss about pros and cons
in
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from
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 many
point
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points
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 of
views
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view
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. Let's begin with the positive part, finding more information about
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space
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the space
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environtment
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environment
 is important in many ways.
For instance
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, the scientists are trying to find solutions
about
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to
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space
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 threats,
such
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 as
meteorit
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meteorites
. If we can predict the tragedy well, we can manage the impact of destruction.
Secondly
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, we have a
decrease
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limited number of
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 resources on
this
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 planet. By exploring
on
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the
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apply
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other planets, perhaps we can find the
replecement
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 resources in order to maintain the
sutainability
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sustainability
 on
earth
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Earth
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.
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, many believe that
social
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the social
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 economy is the most important
factors
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factor
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 for human
being
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beings
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. There are a lot of problems that need to be solved, in terms of funding,
such
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 as education, poverty, health care issues, security, and law,
instead
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 of
space
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 exploration. Those problems are
lack
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a lack
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 of
solution
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solutions
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 in society, so people ask for the solution directly. Another
disagreements
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disagreement
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, they think exploring the
space
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 does not have a direct impact
for
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 people.
To sum up
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, knowledge is priceless, especially for the unknown places to be written in history.
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, there are some problems that must be
fullfilled
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fulfilled
 in order to make a harmony in our life. In my opinion, the
goverment
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government
 should make a proper
budgeting
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budget
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 between human needs and
space
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exploring
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exploration
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.
This
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 strategy will make a happy ending for everybody.

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task achievement
Your introduction could be clearer. Make sure to state your opinion directly.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better. This will help with flow.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to check for spelling errors, such as 'grups' and 'environtment'.
task achievement
You provided some good points about the importance of space exploration.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your essay is clear with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • justified expenditure
  • technological advances
  • earthly concerns
  • telecommunications
  • environmental conservation
  • inspire innovation
  • diplomatic relationships
  • peaceful cooperation
  • long-term survival
  • colonization
  • commercial ventures
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