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Some people believe that modern technology has made shopping easier today, while others believe that it has not helped shoppers much. Discuss both views and give your opinion

In today's world,
technology
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 has become faster than before. It makes our life easier in every sector, and shopping is no exception. Some
people
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 think that shopping has made more easy than before
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technology
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.
However
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, others believe that it has not really improved the shopping
experiences
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experience
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. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both sides before giving my opinion. On the one hand, shopping has become more
time savings
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time-saving
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 and
convenience
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convenient
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due to
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 today's
technology
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. Now,
people
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 can buy anything
whatever
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apply
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they want from
the
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home.
For instance
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, Amazon, AliExpress are some online shopping
web sites
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websites
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, where
people
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 can purchase any
kinds
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kind
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 of
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products
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product
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 at home within 1 or 2 days. There is no need to go outside for shopping.
As a result
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, it saves our money and valuable time.
Additionally
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, there are many online apps and
websides
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websites
, where
people
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 can see reviews and ratings to check product
quality
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 before buying. It helps to choose better
quality
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products
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 argue that
technology
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 has decreased the shopping
quality
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. When
people
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 purchase any
products
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from
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online, there
are
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is
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 no option for touching or seeing these
products
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.
Therefore
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, it is not a trustworthy sector to
people
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.
For instance
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, a person might order a shirt but get the wrong size or
color
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colour
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. Still, most
of
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the
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people
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 enjoy visiting malls or shops, where they can see, feel, and try the
products
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. It is more convenient to choose
good
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good-quality
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quality
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products
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. In conclusion, there are both positive and negative sides. In my opinion,
advantages
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the advantages
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are outweighing
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outweigh
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 the disadvantages. Online shopping reduces transport
cost
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costs
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, saves time, and energy.
People
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 can find
quality
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products
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 if they are
well-known
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familiar
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about
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with
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 online shopping apps or websites.
Therefore
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, I personally prefer online shopping rather than
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visiting
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 outlets.

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task achievement
Make sure all your points are clear and fully explained. Sometimes, your ideas need more detail to be stronger.
coherence
Use linking words like 'however' and 'for example' to connect your ideas better.
coherence
Check for spelling errors, like 'websites' instead of 'web sites'.
positive
You have a clear introduction and conclusion that presents your opinion well.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern technology
  • shopping
  • easier
  • online platforms
  • browse
  • purchase
  • comfort
  • mobile apps
  • compare prices
  • read reviews
  • find discounts
  • time
  • money
  • delivery services
  • doorsteps
  • stores
  • personal interaction
  • screens
  • human contact
  • engaging experience
  • impulse buying
  • access
  • high-speed internet
  • smartphones
  • benefits
  • methods
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