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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (HOANG NHI)

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (HOANG NHI)
The table illustrates how consumers spend their
money
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 on various items in five different
countries
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 in 2002.
Overall
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Countries
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 spend most of their budget on food, drink and tobacco.
On the other hand
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,
countries
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 spend the least
in
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on
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 the sector of leisure and education
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sector.
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 Clothing and footwear had the middle position of spending in 2002. In terms of food, drink and tobacco, Turkey spend huge
money
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 with 32.14%. Second highest is Ireland, which is about 28.91%. Italy, Spain, and Sweden spend in
this
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 sector about 16.36%, 18.80%, and 15.77% respectively. Apart from that, in the sector of clothing and footwear, Italy spend a huge budget
with
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 9.00%, where other
countries
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 spend an average amount of
money
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. In leisure and Education, Turkey spend the highest amount of
money
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 , about 4.35%. Sweden and Italy hold a similar position, where Spain
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 the lowest among all the
countries
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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