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The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The graph below gives information about the preferred leisure activities of Australian children. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.
The bar chart provides key information about the percentages of what those kids are doing about Skateboarding, Bike riding, Watching TV, Electronic, and Art in Australia. The units are measured in proportion.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the proportion of kids watching TV had the highest figures,
while
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 the proportion of kids Skateboarding had the lowest. There were noticeable differences in the categories.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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