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There are people who don't care about their neighbours. Some of them talk too loud or make noise, while others are unsociable. What are the advantages and disadvantages about having a lot of neighbours?

Someone
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Some
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 individuals are careless about their
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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, and
other
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others
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 do not respect them and make noise
,
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;
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in
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apply
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meanwhile, some of them are isolated.
They
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There
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 are many advantages and disadvantages
about
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of
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 having a lot of neighbours
,
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.
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 I believe that the benefits
over comes
Verb problem
outweigh
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 the negatives of having a
much
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lot of
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 neighbours.
To begin
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,
haveing
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having
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Correct article usage
a neighborhood
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neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 is
privilege
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a privilege
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, specially
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specially
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especially
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 if you are living in
villages
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villages,
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every one
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everyone
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have
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has
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his
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 own house. First
all
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of all
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you
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, you
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 will feel safe that you are around families
,
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.
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Also
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, haveing
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haveing
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having
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 surrounding
neighbors
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neighbours
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 promotes your social life
so
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, so
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 you can have friends who care about you.
Linking Words
for
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For
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 example, if you have children
same
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the same
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 age
of
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as
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 your own child and for some reason can not pick him
school
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school,
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 you can ask your
neighbor
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neighbour
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 to help you.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, some
people
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 are isolated and do not care about others and start to
annoying
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annoy
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people
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,
for example
Linking Words
,
people
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 who do not follow the public rules
like
Punctuation problem
, like
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park
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parking
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there
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their
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 cars in other parking
or
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spaces or
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hust
Correct your spelling
having
party
Correct article usage
a party
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 after midnight. In conclusion,
they
Correct pronoun usage
there
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 are advantages and disadvantages
about
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to
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 having a lot of neighbours
it
Punctuation problem
; it
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is depend
Wrong verb form
depends
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 on
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people
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people's
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behavior
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behaviour
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.

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language
Use correct spelling and grammar. For example, 'haveing' should be 'having.'
structure
Make sure to clearly state your main points in a separate paragraph.
content
Provide more examples and details to support your points better.
content
You mention both advantages and disadvantages of having neighbors.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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