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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five protains of fruits and vegatables per day in the UK from 2001 and 2008
The bar chart provides key information about the percentages of people who ate five portions of
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 every day in the UK between 2001 and 2008. The units are measured in proportion.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
percentage
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 of
women
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 who ate
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 was the highest ,
while
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 the
percentage
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 of children who ate
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 was the lowest. There were noticeable differences among the categories.
According to
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 what is shown, in 2001, the
percentage
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 of
women
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 who ate
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 was the highest at around 23%,
whereas
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 the
percentage
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 of children who ate
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 was lower at 13%. By 2006, the
percentage
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 of
women
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 who ate
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 increased to 35%. Meanwhile, the figures for men and children
also
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 changed from 18% and 13% in 2001 to 26% and 24% in 2008.
At the end
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, the
percentage
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 of
women
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 who ate
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 remained the highest throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, vegetables, percentage, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 7 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Portion: a serving size of food.
  • Trend: a general direction in which something is developing or changing.
  • Demographic: related to the structure of populations.
  • Awareness: knowledge or perception of a situation or fact.
  • Socioeconomic status: a person's economic and social position based on income, education, and occupation.
  • Accessibility: the quality of being easy to obtain or use.
  • Guidelines: a set of recommendations or advice on how something should be done.
  • Subsidy: a sum of money granted by the government to assist an industry or business.
  • Lifestyle: the way in which a person lives.
  • Public health: the health of the population as a whole, especially as monitored, regulated, and promoted by the state.
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