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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
The graph depicts the number of transported products in the UK from 1974 to 2002, using four types of transport (road, water, rail, pipeline).
Overall
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, all of the transportation methods listed saw an increasing trend over the period given. Road was constantly the most used form of transport throughout the measured time.
In contrast
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pipeline
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the pipeline
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 was not very popular in the UK. In terms of road, it dominated the graph, starting with approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974, fluctuating slightly, reaching its peak at about 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002. Water was
initially
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 the most used form of transportation, almost on par with rail
in
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 that year, saw an increase (almost 58
million
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tonnes
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) before remaining steady until 1994. It had a marginal decline in 1998 at approximately 57
million
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tonnes
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, and
then
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 increased to over 60
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002. Regarding pipeline usage, it was by far the least used type of transport, starting with almost 5
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974. By 1994, it had increased to over 20
million
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tonnes
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 and remained unchanged for the rest of the measured years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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