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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bircks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bircks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisions where relevant.
The given diagram represents how
bricks
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 are produced for the building industry.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the linear process of producing
bricks
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 consists of 2 stages and 8 steps, from digging clay to delivering ready
breaks
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bricks
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, mainly with the use of automated machines.
To begin
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 with, once the clay has been dug, it is placed into the roller with the help of a metal grid.
Then
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, the third step starts with adding sand and water, and mixing
it
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them
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.
This
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 substance is chopped
in
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into
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 a rectangular shape by
wire
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a wire
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 cutter or poured
in
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into
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 the mould with
the
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a
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 similar form. Having been dried in the oven for around 24 to 48 hours,
firstly
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, the
bricks
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 are burnt in a kiln
on
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at
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 a moderate temperature and, after that,
on
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at
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 extremely high temperatures
which
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, which
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 are accounted for 200C-980C and
870C-1300C
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870C to 1300C
, respectively.
Subsequently
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, they are cooled in
chamber
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a chamber
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 for around 2-3 days, and
finally
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, when the
bricks
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 are ready to be used, they are packaged and transferred for special purposes.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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