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Some feel goverments should invest primarily in educating the young, while others feel this is not a good use of resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
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 will discuss why some people think that
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 money on the young is very important.
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 people think that not
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 thing.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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 primarily in educating the young.
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 we had a Lauren generation
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courses
 of the century .
also
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 invest a many things that
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community
. And reducing
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unemployment
 in the society .
Body paragraph 2
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pepole
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people
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thinks
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that is
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 see that there are many more important things that the governments must take care of. like the pollution . and the
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employment
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What they
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 see is not one of the priorities.
Conclusion
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my personal
 opinion is
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spending
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yuong
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young
 generation is one of the
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priorities
 because when you have
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laured
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lauded
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 will help the country to grow and will make the country
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apply
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better .
so
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 I agree with
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the
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. This will help the reader follow your points better.
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Use full sentences and complete thoughts. This will improve clarity in your writing.
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Provide specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
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Your essay shows you understand both views on this topic, which is good for discussion.
coherence and cohesion
You presented your opinion clearly at the end, which is important.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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