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The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries.

The table below gives information about the daily cost of water per person in five different countries.
The table provides key data about the minimum
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 of water requirements in five countries. The units are measured in percentages and dollars.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that Tanzania has the highest count of
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.
In addition
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, Pakistan and the UK have similar daily figures per person,
whereas
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 the US has the lowest percentage with everyday
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 and wage.
According to
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 what is shown, the daily
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 for one person in Tanzania is 6.4$ , which is a huge number
and
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 Uganda is in the middle with 4.1$, and the US has the least amount of
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 , 0.85$.
However
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, Pakistan has the
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 for one is 1.3 cents compared to the UK 1.3$. In terms of the average daily wage for each country, the United States has a lower percentage , 0.006% compared to England , 0.013%.
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, Tanzania has nearly 5.7% and in Uganda , almost 3.2%, decreasing to around 1.1% in Pakistan.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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