Some people believe physical education classes should be mandatory for all school aged children. Some people argue children should use their spare time on academic purpose. Discuss both point of views and give an opinion

It is claimed that
physcial
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physical
course
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education
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should be obligatory for
students
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of primary schools and secondary schools.
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, others disagree about
this
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by
support
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supporting
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their
kids
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spend
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to spend
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extra
time
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on academic courses. I believe that physical education is good for every
pupils
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pupil
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in schools by not only for body development but
also
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training
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for training
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the mindset of the young
people
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. As the former statement from some folks, physical exercise
are
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is
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so important for
body
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the body
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development of
kids
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, especially in
circulatory
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the circulatory
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system. Because running or climbing on the playground
build
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builds
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a
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apply
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strong
muscels
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muscles
of
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in
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children. and it
also
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help
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helps
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them keep balance
while
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doing
sports
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. All
school aged
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school-aged
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students
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should attend those
activity
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activities
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to train their
body
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bodies
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and stimulate their
immuno
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immune
system as well.
Then
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, they could grow up healthier and have a better life.
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, it is mandatory to join the physical class in China for all
students
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who do not have severe health problems. All
students
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are growing strongly.
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, some
people
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force their children
spend
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to spend
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more
time
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on
homeworks
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homework
or extra academic practice
for
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to
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pursue a better position of academic
score
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position
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. They are super fans of
ranking
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the ranking
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system
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system,
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in which leading a successful life
in
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is
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their
thoughts
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goal
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. It is not good for the development both
in
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apply
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physically and mentally. Because those
students
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will
geting
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get
bored and stressed if all
the
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their
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spare
time
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would be
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is
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fully
occypied
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occupied
.
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, some parents schedule tons of extra academic classes for their
kids
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in
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at
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weekends. And they claimed those courses are
neccessary
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necessary
for applying
the
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to the
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ideal university. It
put
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puts
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a lot of pressure
to
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on
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their
kids
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and makes them unhappy. I believe that the physical training is
neccesary
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necessary
for
kids
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because it is a part of
core
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the core
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value of
the
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apply
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education.
Firstly
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, we would like to let our
childrent
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children
be healthy and happy. In the
sports
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activity, they have the opportunity to learn
some thing
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something
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important for their entire life which can not be learned in academic practices.
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,
people
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learn how to work as a team and how to control their temper during
sports
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. These are
also
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curtical
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crucial
mindsets for the young
people
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.
Therefore
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, it is worth
to spend
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spending
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time
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on physical exercises. In conclusion
.
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,
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sports
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are
benefical
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beneficial
for all aged
students
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and they should spend some of their free
time
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on
it
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them
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.

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language
Make sure to check for spelling errors like 'physcial' and 'neccessary'.
coherence
Try to use clearer linking words to connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your arguments.
task achievement
You provide a clear opinion that supports the idea of physical education being important.
task achievement
You included points for and against physical education, showing good balance.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • overall health
  • physical activity
  • mandatory
  • teamwork
  • social skills
  • academic performance
  • concentration
  • stress relief
  • career prospects
  • intellectual development
  • extracurricular activities
  • compulsory
  • flexibility
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