Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others think that the circumstances of a crime, and the reason for committing it should be always considered when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Nowadays, some people believe that there should be fixed
punshments
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punishments
for each type of
crime
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.
However
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, others think that the
cricumstances
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circumstances
of a
crime
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,
additionly
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additionally
, the reason for committing it
shoud
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should
be always considered. In
this
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essay, the two
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viewpoints
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will be
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. I believe fixed
punshments
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punishments
should be on all
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. On one hand, the people in our
communety
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community
will feel afraid if there
is
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are
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not
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no
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fixed punishments for each
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type
of
crime
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. If there is no clear
punshment
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punishment
, the people will do horrible things.
Moreover
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, that will
suppourt
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support
our police
goverment
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government
to decrease crimes in countries.
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, in 2001, in
1990
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1990,
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the police in
UK
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the UK
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canciled thet
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cancelled the
role and they effectively
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transferred to
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the
socity-safe
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society-safe
. On
other
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the other
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hand, some
individual
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individuals
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agree that the circumstances and the reason for committing it
sould
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should
be always
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always be
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considered when
diciding
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deciding
on the punishment.
Firstly
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, they will play
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a crocuial
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crocuial
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crucial
role in our
socity
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society
.
For instance
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, the
crimers
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criminals
will think
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a thousend
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thousend
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thousand
time
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times
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befor
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before
do
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committing
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any
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a
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crimenal
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crime
,
due to
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they did not know the punishment.
Secondly
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, it is essential for financial. If the
crime
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dicline
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declines
, they will have
alot
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a lot
of money.
To sum up
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,
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in
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my opinion, I believe that there should
having
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be
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clear
regulation
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regulations
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punishments
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and punishments
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for all
type
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types
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of
crime
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.
Due to
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all
reasones
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reasons
I write about it. We should change our
minde
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minds
about
this
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matter.

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state both views and your opinion. Try to make your ideas clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use linking words to connect your ideas better. This will improve the flow of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling for common words, like 'punishments' and 'community.' This will help your overall writing quality.
task achievement
You include an example from the UK, which shows you understand the topic.
task achievement
You express your opinion, which is important in this type of essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Deterrent
  • Judicial process
  • Deliberating
  • Consistent
  • Humane
  • Intent
  • Background
  • Personal circumstances
  • Severity
  • Rehabilitation
  • Sentencing
  • Recidivism
  • Public perception
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