Some people think that students should play more team sports , such as , football and vollyball , rather than individual sports as running and swimming , to what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Physical sports
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become a necessity among educational systems . It is argued
students
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that students
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should focus on squad play over individual sport . Even though a team contribution is
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encouraging
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I do not agree that
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is the most effective way of playing . Individual festivity benefits can not be neglected . One of them is the time flexibility . As these kind of sports is planned
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one's desire and availability ,
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,groups are committed to schedules and all members should attend on time,
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as football matches and championships .
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, lower stress levels . When playing
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individually
, whole concentration will be on the activity
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self not on following team rhythms .
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, better results will be achieved . The effect on the human body is
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significant . Full body exercise will be gained from self-competitions
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therefore
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, fitness improves significantly .
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to groups where the load is divided among members and some of them may not get enough
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. As an example , during competitions each person
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a role depending on
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their
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team
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assistance , if
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their
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colleagues
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share
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the play
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play
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he
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will end the game without any effort . Shared games may provide excitement
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social connection , but
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also
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results
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in stress from time and load with lower rates of
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To conclude
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, the importance of sports is proven , and both single and group games are effective, and neither should be neglected . So iI disagree with
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statement .

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Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction. Use phrases like 'I partly agree' or 'I completely disagree' to clarify your view.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use connecting words (like 'firstly', 'next', 'however') to make your ideas flow better.
Task Achievement
Try to add more examples or proof to support your points. For example, mention specific individual sports that are popular.
Task Achievement
You have a clear opinion and provide reasons for your choice.
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You effectively mentioned both benefits of individual sports and the drawbacks of team sports.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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