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Band 5

You stayed at your friend’s house when you attended a conference in Australia. Unfortunately, you left a large envelope with some important documents in your room. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: thank your friend for the stay describe where you left the envelope ask him/her to return it to you by post Begin your letter as follows:

Dear Tom, I hope you and your wife are doing well. It was great to catch up with you all after a long time,
last
Linking Words
weak
Use the right word
week
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. I must say your house was beautifully decorated
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 your hospitality was out of
the
Correct article usage
this
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 world. Thank you so much for hosting us.
Actually
Add a comma
Actually,
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 when I arrived at home
Punctuation problem
,
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I
realized
Use the right word
realised
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 I left a parcel at your house.
Although
Linking Words
 you know I don't usually leave things behind,
due to
Linking Words
Linking Words
last minute
Use the right word
last-minute
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I
Punctuation problem
, I
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had to rush and I
forget
Wrong verb form
forgot
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 to collect my envelope. The yellow envelope contains crucial documents of one of my clients
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 I
last
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 saw
near
Correct pronoun usage
it near
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 the dressing table where we stayed. Please check all the possible locations where I can
left
Wrong verb form
leave
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, especially downstairs near the bookshelf. I would be grateful
If
Fix capitalization
if
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 you could find these critical documents and parcel
via
Correct pronoun usage
them via
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 speed post to my office address, as I need
it
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them
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 before
the
Correct article usage
apply
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next weekend.
Additionally
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,
It
Fix capitalization
it
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 would be
appreciate
Wrong verb form
appreciated
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 if you
can
Wrong verb form
could
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 wrap these documents in plastic, I just want to prevent them from getting
damage
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damaged
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. Thank you again for your warm welcome. Waiting for a positive response and my parcel. Warm regards, Amar.

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task achievement
Make sure to proofread for spelling errors like 'weak' instead of 'week'.
coherence and cohesion
Try to keep one main idea in each paragraph for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer transitions between your thoughts to enhance flow.
positive feedback
Your friendly tone is very welcoming and appreciative.
positive feedback
You clearly stated the issue and what you need from your friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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