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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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sthe
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the
 total
number
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 of tourists to four international museums from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the Louvre
museum
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 was the most popular to visit in these years. The figures were estimated between 8
million
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 and 9
million
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. The least popular place to visit is the London Science
Museum
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. The
number
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 of tourists was 4
million
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 and 2
million
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 between 1980 and 2015.
To begin
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 with, the
number
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 of individuals
that
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who
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 visited to Vatican museums was approximately 5
million
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 in 1980,
then
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 rose sharply to 10
million
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 in 2015. Shenzhen
museum
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 visitors fluctuated to roughly 4
million
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 in 2015.
Moreover
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, the
number
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 of visitors to the Louvre
museum
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 fluctuated between 1980 and 2015. The average was nearly 9
million
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 in 2015. The statistics of tourists in the London Science
Museum
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 remained between 1980 and 1985. After 1985, it started to decline in 1990,
then
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 remained stable till 2015. It was estimated to
2
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have 2
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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