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Band 2.5

Improvementa in health, 3ducation and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

I significantly agree with the statement that rich countries should help poor countries in terms of health, education and
trade
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the trade
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 sector. because
,
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apply
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this
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these
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 sectors play
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a vital
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 role in the growth of an economy of nation.
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with
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 rich
nations
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has
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have
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 great resources and technology which can
accerlate
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accelerate
 the growth of poor
nations
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 in
following
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the following
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 areas
such
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 as education, healthcare, technology and infrastructure. Developed
nations
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eduction
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education
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 and medical aid to underdeveloped
nations
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 to support them.
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for
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 example, they can send
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a specialized
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specialized
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specialised
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 medical team and doctors to
that
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those
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inneed
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in need
nations
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 to educate or
trained
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train
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 doctors. so proper treatment can be provided to people. To support
nation
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national
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 equal
right
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rights
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policies
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, policies
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 should be
genertaed
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generated
, which
is
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are
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 regulated
to
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 all
the
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nations
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 regardless of any caste, religion
and
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or
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 gender. which brings equality among people and
educted
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educates
 people about their rights
which
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, which
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also
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help
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helps
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 to boost
economy
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the economy
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apart
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, at
national
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the national
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level
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 fair trade polices and climate change mitigation should be implemented to support poor
nations
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 in
fair
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a fair
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 way. To
summarize
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summarise
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this
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 , richer
nations
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 should take responsibility to improve poor
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nations
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nations'
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 economy
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whereas
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, whereas
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 poor
nations
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equall
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equal
 efforts to boost the
sustainble
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sustainable
 development of the country.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly answer all parts of the question.
coherence
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one main point.
cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows logically to the next.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion and present some good points.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • development
  • poorer nations
  • governments
  • richer nations
  • responsibility
  • improvement
  • healthcare
  • education
  • trade
  • cooperation
  • mutual benefits
  • financial aid
  • technical expertise
  • resources
  • global stability
  • reduce inequalities
  • international organizations
  • NGOs
  • facilitating
  • assistance
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