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The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002

The table below gives information about consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002
The table illustrates the proportion of consumer spending on three kinds of items in five countries during 2002.
Overall
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,Food/Drinks/Tobacco represented the largest
items
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item
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 area in all countries,
while
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 Leisure/Education consistently received the lowest spending.Notably,
Turkey
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 recorded the
high
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highest
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 spending on
essential
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essentials
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,
where as
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whereas
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 Italy invested the most in clothing. About Food/Drinks/Tobacco,
Turkey
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 had the highest percentage
32.14
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, 32.14
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%,followed by Ireland
28.91
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, 28.91
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%.
In contrast
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, Sweden and Italy
lower
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 figures,at 15.77% and 16.36% respectively. For Clothing/Footwear ,Italy stood out with the highest proportion
9.00
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%,which was considerably above other nations. The
remain
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 four countries showed similar figures:
Turkey
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 6.63%,Spain 6.51%,Ireland 6.43%,and Sweden 5.40%. In terms of Leisure /Education
spending
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, spending
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 was generally low.
Turkey
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 highest proportion
4.35
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, 4.35
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%,followed by Sweden
3.22
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, 3.22
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% and Italy
3.20
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, 3.20
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%. Ireland and Spain spent the least in
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this
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these
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 kinds,at 2.21% and 1.98% respectively.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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